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Title: Shut up & Kiss me

Author: lukey_pookeys_girl

Okay so first. Your summary is PERF! Kudos on that, great job! Next is characters. I’m not a big fan of people having a bit of characters on a story. So if you wanted to fix that, you could have Ashton, Calum, and Michael as one character spot. You know, so the only characters you would have would be Alex Jones, Luke Hemmings & The other three boys as one because they all say the same summary anyways. There would only be three character plots! Other than that everything else in the summary & characters is AWESOME! So great job! :)

So next is the chapters! My personal favorite!! Okay so. Here it goes. I did see a couple of capitalization mistakes but nothing huge and definitely nothing to sweat about. Also, there was one place here you out dad instead of day.

"So today's our big dad" my dad exclaimed, resting the newspaper down from his face onto the kitchen counter.

I think you meant day instead of dad? But that’s a honest mistake. Also, your spacing was a bit off. Example from story!

“Whatever” i huffed, finishing my breakfast and then chugging down my glass of juice. “I’m gonna go shower” i said bringing my plate to the sink and walked upstairs.
“Dont be too long, we leave in three hours” my mum calls out reminding me that i have so much time and don’t need to rush.

It should have spaces between each speech line. Like this.

“Whatever” I huffed, finishing my breakfast and then chugging down my glass of juice.

“I’m gonna go shower” I said bringing my plate to the sink and walked upstairs.

“Dont be too long, we leave in three hours” my mum calls out reminding me that I have so much time and don’t need to rush.

Also, there was a bit of grammar mistakes, and places where you didn’t put an apostrophe, and places where a comma could’ve been used. But again, nothing to sweat about. But I didn’t really see any HUGE spelling mistakes. I honestly love your story! I’m one of your subscribers! Can’t wait for another update!! If you want, I can show you where I saw these mistakes, so you can fix them if you want. Also if you just copy and paste your chapters into Microsoft word, the program will show you the mistakes too! And if you want, I can review chapter 2! Thanks for waiting and I hope you enjoy your review!! Muah! Much love!!!:*****

Notes

Heres your review! Sorry for the wait!!! Enjoy!! I bolded some of the mistakes here. Again, I can show where the rest are.