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Revenge on Eleanor Calder
Haha wow that took longer to read than I expected! You have really beautiful long chapters! But being me I have A.D.D. really bad, and I can't sit and do something for literally more than twenty minutes haha. So I'm really sorry for the wait...BLAME IT ON MY A.D.D. Oh man that was a Sail moment for me, I really hope you know what I'm talking about or this is really awkward.
But back to the review, I love this story so much. You have created this amazing piece that is super original and just wow. There were tiny flaws I found, but they were so minor that you would only find them if you were looking for them.
I'm going to start with the biggest thing, which isn't even that big, you had a few Moments where the writing style didn't match the mood. What I mean by this is that sometimes your sentences had some trouble flowing with a certain mood. So for an example; if there was a scene with anger or fear I see sentence as being more choppy. Honestly it wasn't that noticeable, but as the story progressed you got better at making every thing match the type of mood.
On that note, I did find some punctuation and few grammatical errors. If you read over your chapters two to three times, then I can predict that you will find at least one mistake. I can tell that you do go back and read over your work again, and you do put a lot of hard work in to your chapters so props to you!
Over all I feel like you have done an extremely good job with it, and I hope no one steals your ideas because they're very original. I would have never thought that some one would want to kill one of the boys' girlfriends at all, and you have out me on edge for who the friggin poo who the killer is! I can't wait until you come out with the last few chapters! #LittleRedCoat
Overall rating: 9.5
Notes
If you didn't like this review or found it offensive in any way, please let me know and I will take it down ASAP! I hoped I helped you in the progression of your writing and future fan fics!
❤@This_crazy_girl
Again sorry for that wait!
@Oops_Hi
Hii! Yeah I'm still (kind of) active. I could probably do it, but it could be a while I usually get on like once a week. But I might be able to make some time. c: can't wait!
8/27/15