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VMA's

This story was right on the bulls eye! It really was good, and every thing was well written. There were very small things that could use some attention, but other then that it was practically perfect!

Some grammar caught my eye as well as spelling, but I know that Australia's grammar and spelling are much different from The Unites States' grammar. I saw in your bio that you're from there, I'm not like a creepy stalker or something.

Also there were some awkward small POV's, and they almost distracted from the writing. Although you made it flow in a way it was still easy to read; just be sure next time your writing one it flows with the writing. When you read back over your chapter, I suggest you read it aloud to yourself to see how it sounds.

Thats pretty much it! Any thing else was amazing! You are a great writer, and awesome at coming up with original fan fictions. I now have to read the many other story's you have!

Overall rating: 9.5

Notes

If you do not like this review, please ask me nicely, and I will take it down ASAP! I hoped I helped you with creating a better story(s).

❤ This_crazy_girl

A/N: Sorry I haven't been updating much, I have a big project due soon and I'm trying to get it done. Priorities can just go suck a dick... (-.-) haha once it's done I'll be updating more! YAY!

Comments

@Oops_Hi

Hii! Yeah I'm still (kind of) active. I could probably do it, but it could be a while I usually get on like once a week. But I might be able to make some time. c: can't wait!

This_crazy_girl
8/27/15

ntEeeyyyyy back again this account use to be called Goldenheart. You reviewed Secrets(use to be called Stand), and Captured which both times helped, so I got another Fanfic if you do not mind checking out its just the start of it though. It's Called Angles and Demons. please and thank you I dont know if you are still active though. and if you wouldnt mind please do another review of Secrets since we added a lot. again please and thank you.

Hi_Oops
8/21/15

Could you do A Feeling That I Can't Fight? It was my first fanfiction and I don't know how I did on it. Please and thank you ;D

Steffi_Hemmings00 @ 5SecondsOfSummerFanfiction.com
1/17/15

I don't know if I asked yet or not lol but coukd you please review my story (how you changed my life) because its my first fanfic ever and I would like on advice and would like to know how I'm doing