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Title: A life of Payne (I love the title!!!!!!)

Author: Kass_april

Summary was… spot on! I made me (personally) want to read more! I wanted to know what the hell was going to happen. Great job on that babe!! Next is characters, I review FanFictions, and the most annoying thing I find, is when there to many characters or unless characters spots. What could you do to fix it you ask? Well I’ll tell you! Just like you did with the babes of 5sos, do the same with the angels of One Direction. Like have them as one, all of them in one pic and set that as your character spot. Im saying this because, the 1D boys don’t have a summary anyways, so it would make sense. But other that, PERF!

I actually am a subscriber to this story and I honesty love it!! But I do have some things you could fix love. Not to worry, there not that huge, and it’s nothing to worry about. First order of business. Spacing. Your spacing is off. I’ll put an example here for you.

"And we'll never be ROYALS!" I sang as I walked up the drive way with my best friend Ashley.
"Katie how many time do I have to tell you... you cant sing" Ash said trying to keep a straight face and not laugh at me.

"Ouch that stings" I said while bringing my hand to my heart which just made us both smile.
"Well we both know that one day I'm going to be an amaz-bubbles singer!" I continued.
"In your next life maybe" Ash said bursting my bubble and making us both laugh while we walked through the front door.

This is yours, but this is how to should be. (Now it might seem like I’m nit-picking but I’m saying these things to help you help the readers, read your story a little easier.)

"And we'll never be ROYALS!" I sang as I walked up the drive way with my best friend Ashley.

"Katie how many time do I have to tell you... you cant sing" Ash said trying to keep a straight face and not laugh at me.

"Ouch that stings" I said while bringing my hand to my heart which just made us both smile

"Well we both know that one day I'm going to be an amaz-bubbles singer!" I continued.

"In your next life maybe" Ash said bursting my bubble and making us both laugh while we walked through the front door.

Between every person saying things. There should be spaces. Like above. And this example, applies to the rest of the chapters. I saw very, very, very little spelling/grammar mistakes. You missed places where you didn’t put, a comma, apostrophe, and spelt some words wrong but that’s about everything. I honestly can’t believe this is your first fan fiction! You’re AMAZING! If you need me to review chapter 2 or any other chapters, or show you where the spelling/grammar mistakes, I totally will!!!! I hope you enjoy this review princess!!!!!

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Here's the review!! Much love cupcake!! Enjoy!