Story Reviews by Foodaddict

Ok. Most likely you will hate me after this.

Honestly, I was bored. It is full of cliches. There isn't anything original in it. There are hundreds of other fanfics near identical to this one.

I think you need to put more of your own thing into this story. But it was a little original that you used twins instead of one kid.

I give this story 1.8 out of 5 stars. Thank you, and keep writing? I accidentally hit the question mark and it won't erase. Grr. I meant !

Notes

Please don't take any of this personally. I mean this only as constructive criticism and am not a professional. Please rate this review