Author's Note

Alrighty, you have a really great thing going for you! The story line is used quite a bit but if you throw enough twists and turns that shouldn't matter. Your grammar and structure is great along with spelling which makes my life ten times easier. I like the length of your chapters but you could definitely make them a little longer if you add more depth.

I only have a few comments:

1. Don't, and I repeat, DON'T use polyvore as an excuse to not explain the outfit. It could be as simple as, "I put on a cute red top and skinny jeans," but don't say, "I put on this." I have no idea what your character put on. Is it a dress to impress other guys or is it sweats and a t-shirt because she's so upset about what Harry did to her?

2. Yes, you have great detail and I know exactly what is going on but....it's rushed. In the first chapter she finds out he cheated on her; drag it out a bit more. Same with Harry finding out- drag it out. I'm not saying to do this to make your chapters longer but if you make it longer it will add depth to your story. With depth, it is easier for me to fall in love with your characters and ultimately your story as a whole.

3. When Harry comes in he starts crying. That's a natural reaction but I honestly don't think he would be balling his eyes out; however, if he is you have to make sure his emotions are consistent like that throughout the whole story. Megan has a reason to be crying the way she is but Harry is the cheater here. He knows he did something wrong so his tears should be tears of guilt.

I love the detail and the effort you have put in so far. There are only a few chapters so I can't say too much but I'm always willing to go back whenever you complete a few more! I hope this helped and happy writing :)

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