Heartbreaker

rate: 9.9
idea/originality: +
grammar: good
advice: 2

I loved the originality. It's funny and definitely is something I'd take the time to read. Since you aren't too far along maybe ask for me to look at it again when you have more!

1. a few minor grammatical errors (I am a grammar nazi so you did really great with that)
2. you said she had, "curled blonde hair" but her picture is dark brown.

We are Just Friends

rate: 9.9
idea/originality: +
grammar: good
advice: 1

Love it so far!

Again, write some more and I'll look at it again if you want!

p.s.- you have gained a subscriber on We are Just Friends!

Notes

rate: 1-10
idea/originality: + (great), = (good), -- (okay)
grammar: great, good, needs work, poor
advice: whatever the number is...that's how many things I have to say about it

hope that helped and remember that's just my opinion!