rate: 11 (yes, I do mean 11)
idea: ++
grammar: great!
advice: ...

Okay, first of all, I don't know how you don't have more subscribers. I know you only have 2 chapters but it's really really good! At first when I started reading about Niall I was like, Oh God, not another depressing story (not that there's anything wrong with that because some of mine have some heavy subject matters) but when it was a dream I was happy. Definitely one of the most unique ideas yet. Your grammar is perfect and you gained a new subscriber! Keep going and I'd love to rate more in the future if you'd like!