Author's Note

First of all, sorry this took so long! I've been writing a lot and I've also had a lot of school work but here it is! To begin I think it's really great and original! I love how you have the three different bands and it the way it is set up makes sense. It isn't random or tacky; they're at an art school which is perfect.

I only found a few things I would look at and they're all easy fixes.

1. Numbers
Write all your numbers out unless they are crazy. For example:
1= one
100= one hundred
2:00= two o'clock
Now if it's like 7:23 or 26,863,235 obviously don't write that but if it's quick and easy go ahead and spell it!

2. Skip
Don't use the whole "skip this". There is an easier way to do that just by saying:
"After our walked we arrived...."
Using skip breaks up your work. If it's a different day in a chapter that's fine but if it's around the same time just throw a few extra words in there.

3. Who?
There was only one scene in one of the first chapters where I was a little confused. Kat was at the gazebo and Luke showed up but I wasn't sure who it was at first. He had a guitar so I was thinking either Niall or Luke but you didn't define it until a little later on in the chapter. Maybe you meant to do it that way which is fine, I'm just letting you know so if you didn't mean to do that!

Overall it was really great. It's realistic, original, and actually super funny. I found myself laughing a lot and sometimes it's hard to get a reader to actually laugh out loud rather than just a small smile. Detail is great, I can see it all! Keep it up and I hope everything keeps going as is!

Happy writing!

-A

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