Reviews & DUMB Fan-Fic Moments
M.P.D
Rating: 9
I think that this is off to a great start!
Positive Points:
-Story plot isn't over used, but it is used a lot.
-Good grammar, I like that.
-Not a lot of punctuation mistakes
-The way you describe things is great! It's nothing like: "He hovered over me".
Negative Points:
-Once again, not a lot of punctuation mistakes. There is some there, and most of the commas are spaced away from the words.
Ex: I grabbed my binder , bag , and pencils.
-Some grammar mistakes to fix
-It seems a little bit to rushed. I mean, I don't think a person with a disease like that would actually do that...
Overall thoughts: You are off to a great start! Keep writing! :)
I think that this is off to a great start!
Positive Points:
-Story plot isn't over used, but it is used a lot.
-Good grammar, I like that.
-Not a lot of punctuation mistakes
-The way you describe things is great! It's nothing like: "He hovered over me".
Negative Points:
-Once again, not a lot of punctuation mistakes. There is some there, and most of the commas are spaced away from the words.
Ex: I grabbed my binder , bag , and pencils.
-Some grammar mistakes to fix
-It seems a little bit to rushed. I mean, I don't think a person with a disease like that would actually do that...
Overall thoughts: You are off to a great start! Keep writing! :)
Hahaha, I have just spent the past half hour reading all your chapters. Not only is this hilarious but now I have something to look forward to!!
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6/16/15