Reviews & DUMB Fan-Fic Moments

{Rating: 1}

First of all, WOAH.

Secondly, I'm just going to put this up here first, just so you wont get mad at me.

I'm sorry that I'm so not sorry if you didn't like your review. You asked for it, I said I was going to be honest, and you got my honest opinion. If you want me to delete the review, just ask and I will. But still, that will never change my opinion. I'm a very harsh critic and if you have a problem with it, that's just too bad.

Okay, now to your review.

Honestly, I HATED it.
Yes, I stooped down that low.

The plot is un-original, the grammar and punctuation mistakes you have make it so hard to read and you have WAY too many characters!

The only good thing about the story is that the chapters are long.
Also, here's a tip:

DON'T write sentences and speeches like this:

"Wow, It's beautiful out today." i said, looking around myself while the wind blew my hair and the sun rose.

Write some thing like...lets say...THIS:

"Wow," I began almost speechless at the sight.
"It's beautiful out today," I said as the wind blew onto my face as the gorgeous sun rose.

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