Reviews & DUMB Fan-Fic Moments

Rating: 3


WOAH...I think this was WAY too rushed.....

The kissed in the third chapter? I would think he should have brought the girl to her HOME and take the risk......


I also didn't like that it wasn't spaced at all, and that it was also written like this:


"What are you doing" (Niall)

"Nothing much" (Amy)

There is a lot of grammar and punctuation mistakes and I think the plot is a bit over used.

I mean, instead of basing it off a movie, be original!

I saw the movie a few years ago, and it was almost nothing like that!

I think you just start over from scratch, and base it of your ideas.

Work on your grammar and punctuation, try to make it less rushed, then I think it would be a better story!

You would have more votes, subscribers, and fans!

If you do decide to take my advice, come back to me and I will gladly review it for you :)

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