Rating: 3

You're very good at story ideas! I love the mum's back story and the lessons Darcy is going to learn from them. It's a different tactic than most people take with the whole "I fell in love with a bandmate from One Direction". Instead, it's the mum and her love life with the boys. Awesome!

My advice is the same, split up your paragraphs, woman! And put details! Details are your best friend when it comes to creative writing!

Overall, you have potential. I can see it in your writing, and your ability to come up with unique ideas for stories. We just need to awaken that creative writing side of you and you'll be golden.

Good luck!

~M