Two Kinds In One Tutor - Comments

@emmaphants
thanks so much, when i get time too, ill try to write more. ive just been very busy lately

i think its cute! i havent had very much free time lately so i havent been able to read much but what ive read is cute

@emmaphants
oh alright thanks, i was thinking about that too. i was trying to figure out how to seperate the paragraphs but ill start next chapter. but other than that, what do u think of the plot of the story itself?

not trying to be mean, just trying to help but try using paragraphs. everytime a different person starts talking you should start a new paragraph. it makes it easier for the reader to focus. Also, instead of saying 'u' say 'you'. Also capitalize names and the first word of sentences. I know it's fanfiction and you probably feel like grammar and proper writing doesn't matter but a lot of people won't read it if the mechanics of the story are bad no matter how good the plot is. I don't mean to be a bitch, i'm sorry I'm just trying to help... I had a problem with long paragraphs too when I first started.

@nandos for lunch?
thnx :) im glad u like it. ill continue it sometime this week

Love this story! Its so original.

I did all 4:)

I like it please update

@mamma_direction
yea i tried to make it original and not like the average fanfic thing but thx

@lovable directioner
Its just that I personally haven't read one with the double personality thing. Its cool.

@mamma_direction
thx. ive never got that compliment of it being different than all the other fanfics. one question though....how is it different?

@Overthesky
lol thx for the advice. i guess its just a habit of putting all the convos together. ill try to stop that. and as for the capital letters in front of every sentence.....yea, "aint nobody got time for that" lol, jk. ill try though. thx im glad u like it :)

I really like it(: (that's a good thing because I'm very picky, btw;3) anyways...one piece of advice. Just don't get mad at me, aha. I think you just use a capital letter at the beginning of every sentence and/ or conversation. Also, when someone is talking, you should separate the lines. For example, instead of doing this:

"WHAT?!? i dont need a tutor. i dont need anyone to tell me or to make me feel stupid. i know that already on my own. i rather fail." she raised her voice in a whisper "star, like i said im done arguing with u. your gonna have a tutor weather u like it or not."

Do this:

"WHAT?? I don't need a tutor. I don't need anyone to tell me or to make me feel stupid. I already know that on my own. I'd rather fail."

She raised her voice into a whisper. "Star, like I said I am done arguing with you. You're going to have a tutor whether you like it or not."

Yeah? No? Just continue(: I like it!

(Wow, I should start reviewing stories, huh ;D) no? Okay. Good luck!(:

Love this story. It's so different than all the other fanfics i've read. Love it.

@Harts4Lisa
i sure will, thx. im glad u like it :)

I like it, please write more

@one_direction_mrs_malik
no prob. glad u like it :)

please update emedietly

@lovable directioner
I can agree with that statement 100%

@one_direction_mrs_malik

definitely will update. love writing it just as much as u love reading it. thx : )

@Awesome_girl_123

i tried to get in to as much detail as possible to describe the hot version of marcel. lets face it though. no words can exactly describe him. hes too per-fect <3

@KINNEDYFSD
im glad you love it. i will update ASAP. thx so much :)