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I need help with improvements

Hello (:

My name is Abygail and I'm 16. I've been writing fanfiction for a long ass time- and only about this boyband. I'm super siked about the story I'm currently writing, and even moreso because it got me nominated for some fanfiction awards.

But anytime I try to improve it, I can't think of anything that would help it succeed. The rating isn't what I want it to be so I wanted to come to you guys, the public, and ask for your help. What can I do to improve my story 'The Donation'? I want to make it as good as it can be- so please, no matter how mean it sounds, please tell me how I can improve my story. I want to better it for all readers.

  • Chapters: 12
  • Rating: 8.0
  • Votes: 23
  • Subscribers: 12
  • Views: 6,930
abygail.bauman abygail.bauman

I like the story, but I feel as though you rused the plot. The characters hardly knew each other when they decided to become an item.

JasperRenee JasperRenee

Thank you for the advice ((:

abygail.bauman abygail.bauman

I told you... More Parry cuteness. Send them on dates, make them play twenty questions

Otherwise I'm abandoning my position as captain of the ship (Lol Not really)

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So your plot is good I would just take a little more time to get through it like I read all 13 chapters in less than 20 minutes so description can make it a little longer. I do second on the rushed thing you have Harry telling her he loves her in less than two weeks.

Other than that it's good just make sure going ahead you do your research about pregnancy and FBI work such. (It takes 10 days for an early detection pregnancy test to work)

ontheedge ontheedge