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Okay, here it is. Your story The Night It All Went Down is pretty good. There are however a few things that I didn’t think were so great. For starters, the cover. Your whole story is about a murder and it’s mysterious and dark yet your cover is so light and colourful, I don’t think it matches the story or the title.

Another thing is that some of the information in your story is important yet irrelevant. Like in chapter 3 when Kayleigh meets Abby Ingrid for the first time. I get that you needed to include all of the information that you did because it’s what a real lawyer would say to their client in that situation, but at the same time that information is irrelevant to the story and doesn’t change the plot in any way so it has no use being there, if you know what I mean.

I also think that the superpowers that Niall and Kayleigh get are kind of…childish, I guess. I mean, the whole story up until that point is really realistic and believable then that happens and suddenly I am reminded that it’s just fiction, you know?

Although, I do like how you have those rare chapters in the POV of the murderer because they make me want to know who the murder is even more. I am impressed by how much you know about murder cases, police procedures and lawyer agreements.

Overall, I think that this story is pretty good. The grammar and spelling are pretty good, the story line is interesting enough and I haven’t read many stories like that. Keep updating and make sure to keep the twists and turns coming because so far they are good.
~Sophalicious

DEAR ALL PEOPLE
This story is good. I rate it a 6/10. It has a murder mystery/crime theme so if any of you are into that then this would be good for you. I know that there aren't a lot of those types of fanfics on this website so this is something really different and interesting.

Notes

I am SOOOOOOO sorry love. I have had this review done for ages but then i forgot to post it so i am so sorry that it is so late.

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