Story Reviews

Overall I did like this story so my overall rating is 7/10

The character development was pretty good, you cared about what was going to happen to the characters in the story.

My points to improve on would be: it sometimes seems a bit rushed like things in the story are happening too fast and not explained enough, I know it is fiction but it seems unrealistic in some parts, also a bit cliche in others.

Overall writing style was good and consistent, however it was slightly hard to read as it was one big chunky paragraph not broken down, so that could be a presentational improvement, having smaller paragraphs, there weren't many spelling mistakes that I spotted.

I would recommend this to someone else to read, I hope the ending isn't predictable though :)

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