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Luke's girl98 Review!

Luke's girl98

Welcomed Into The Darkness

Grade: 4

Strong Points:
-I like your style of writing. It's awesome haha

Things to Work On:
-The plot was kind of original. I'm not a fan of the whole gang thing because there are sooo many stories about gangs.
-There were just a couple of grammatical errors but you can change those easily.
-There were so many point of view changes I felt like there wasn't really a main character, and it felt like there were so many different plot lines. I don't want to spoil anything, but it's Ashton's relationship, Luke's relationship, but then Michael and Calum are involved too and it was just a bit much.

Would I recommend this story to someone else? Maybe a different story that you wrote but not this one.

Notes

hope you're satisfied :)

check out my new fanfic? <3

Comments

slow hands by dainey

Dainey Dainey
6/24/17

@Kat21


Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

The author seems to be busy and you've had a wait. I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)

@its_simplymuke


Hi! I don't normally do this but I'll just get right on it.

The author seems to be busy and you've had a wait. I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)

@XMuKeKeTcHuPX


Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

The author seems to be busy and you've had a wait. I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)

@Lukeifer


Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

The author seems to be busy and you've had a wait. I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)