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Luke's girl98
Welcomed Into The Darkness
Grade: 4
Strong Points:
-I like your style of writing. It's awesome haha
Things to Work On:
-The plot was kind of original. I'm not a fan of the whole gang thing because there are sooo many stories about gangs.
-There were just a couple of grammatical errors but you can change those easily.
-There were so many point of view changes I felt like there wasn't really a main character, and it felt like there were so many different plot lines. I don't want to spoil anything, but it's Ashton's relationship, Luke's relationship, but then Michael and Calum are involved too and it was just a bit much.
Would I recommend this story to someone else? Maybe a different story that you wrote but not this one.
Welcomed Into The Darkness
Grade: 4
Strong Points:
-I like your style of writing. It's awesome haha
Things to Work On:
-The plot was kind of original. I'm not a fan of the whole gang thing because there are sooo many stories about gangs.
-There were just a couple of grammatical errors but you can change those easily.
-There were so many point of view changes I felt like there wasn't really a main character, and it felt like there were so many different plot lines. I don't want to spoil anything, but it's Ashton's relationship, Luke's relationship, but then Michael and Calum are involved too and it was just a bit much.
Would I recommend this story to someone else? Maybe a different story that you wrote but not this one.
Notes
hope you're satisfied :)
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