Mistakes

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REVIEW:
Cover: 1
Originally: Its not unique at all honestly.
Paragraphs: Good. Just NEVER do ONE LONG PARAGRAPH for a chapter!! :)
How I feel About the Idea: 3 ~ Everyone has a story like this.
How You portray your characters: 3-4, could be better.
Grammar, spelling, etc..: Hardly no mistakes that I caught on to.
Some Tips from me ---> to you:
*Always let us know who says it, Try to never leave a line of dialogue blank. Be sure to say things such as ".." He sighs, "...." She rolled her eyes, "..." Harry chuckled, Just so we know who's saying what. Some people get confused at times, me being one of those people.
*Never rush things, everyone should know this!
*Be yourself when it comes to how you write.


Overall: Don't rush things and just try to keep the flow of things. Try not to make the obvious happen all the time. Try to spice things up in your own unique ways and all.

If I were to recommend your story:
I would recommend your story to newer people, or people I know like the idea.
I would only recommend if you improve, because honestly there are some things you need to look over. The idea needs to be a little more unique, add a twist maybe.

Good luck on your story, I hoped this help. Please remember to never take anything to heart. I'm not trying to be rude, mean, etc.. I'm just trying to help you out, besides you asked for it! :)

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