His Property

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REVIEW:
Cover: 6
Originally: It isn't so unique, but its a good idea. I'm sure there's lots of people who like the idea.
Paragraphs: Good. Just NEVER do ONE LONG PARAGRAPH for a chapter!! :)
How I feel About the Idea: 6
How You portray your characters: 6-7, Its okay, could possibly be better.
Grammar, spelling, etc..: Very good!!
Some Tips from me ---> to you:
*Don't bold words, some people get sidetracked by that. if you want to emphasis the word do it like this: I love her this girl, she's my entire world. BUT bold times, dates, and those times things if you decide to include them. Also, its a nice idea to bold text messages between characters, just something some people do though.
*Never rush things, everyone should know this!
*Be yourself when it comes to how you write.


Overall: Just try to put a little more detail in. Don't rush things, rushing is bad. Try to portray the other main characters a little more different, just a little more detail. Try to give more of a background story through out the entire thing. Relate events to things that have happened to the characters in the past and such. Just always make sure that we know what Naya is thinking, how she feels, and what her emotions and feelings are. Just remember to always be yourself when it comes to writing, you don't have to take my advice. But just do what really makes you comfortable, this isn't to change you. Its to try and help improve you :)

If I were to recommend your story:
I would recommend your story to newer people, or people I know like the idea.
I would only recommend if you improve, because honestly it needs just a pinch of improvement to be amazing!!

Good luck on your story, I hoped this help. Please remember to never take anything to heart. I'm not trying to be rude, mean, etc.. I'm just trying to help you out, besides you asked for it! :)

Notes

always be yourself :)