❇R e v i e w s

I read your story Caught Between Two simce it had the most votes.

Grammar- There was lots of grammar mistakes that need fixed, especially spelling errors. If I were you I'd go back and reread the whole story and fix those mistakes. With the mistakes, it became hard for me to concentrate on the story line.

Plot Line- I've seen the plot line serval times, so it didn't interest me, sorry. I did like the way Marcel's personality was in the story. I've just read lots of stories where the pretty girl moves to England and runs into Harry, or incase in this story, Harry and his "brother" Marcel. And the whole love triangle thing gets boring to read when it's repeated by several writers on the website. Though I truly like how the story addresses a serious topic; bullying.

Summary- The summary was simple; I got a clear overview of what the story was gonna be about. It was a good summary.

Cover- It's good. Clear images. I could easily see that the main character would have to be choosing between Marcel or his bad boy brother, Harry.

Characters- Pictures are good. I feel like you could of did without the descriptions. I will find out who the characters are and how they portray themselves throughout the story. Leave us readers wondering how this and that character will act in the story. Harry was alright; I'm just sort of tired of seeing him portrayed as a bad boy, but then I guess it did work for this story kind of. I feel like Marcel out shined him in the story; loved his cute, nerdy personality. The other minor characters were alright. Liv was decent, just sort of simple.

What should be changed or fixed- Definitely grammar. I would try to spice the story line up more. I'd also try to add a bit more details and remove things that you don't need in the story. I just don't feel like it was original as it could have been.

Overall Rating- My personal opinion, I wasn't a fan of the story. It isn't that you're not a good writer or have potential, it's the overused plot line. Now there might be readers out there that really enjoy this type of plot line, but I'm just not one of them. I give this story a rating of 4 over grammar and the plot line. But I know that you can fix the story to make it better.

Notes

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