Grammar- Okay, so what I've noticed is you aren't spacing between words and periods and commas. Like here is an example- After taking the pill,I walked downstairs with the glass of water in my hand and saw his jacket on my couch. It happens a lot throughout the story. It just looks nicer and neater when you space between words and commas, yah know what I mean? It isn't something major, but still there. There were a few minor errors, but nothing that you can't fix. Make sure to put periods where commas need to go. I've seen sentences where you'd put a comma where a period would need to go. Just watch out for that. Overall, the grammar was good. Spelling was on point.

Plot Line- I love how Harry and Violet click well; one of the good points of the story. I've seen this plot used a couple times, but yours stands out in a way. It was interesting at parts, but then at other parts it dragged and I became bored. I at first thought this was AU until One Direction pops in as actually One Direction lol. I don't know how I felt about Violets sister randomly appearing in the story. It was sort of random, unless her popping up will lead to other major events in the story. You are amazing at using details throughout the story! I'm curious to see where this story will be going.

Summary- It was okay. I would of liked to read a bit more about the story, but it also does leave intrigue, which is good.

Cover- It's nice, and definitely eye catching!

Characters- Quotes are fantastic! I love when writers put quotes as the character description instead of a boring descriptions of them, that we can easily find out in the story. Love how you used black and white photos, added a great touch.

What should be changed or fixed- Touch ups on some of the grammar. Tell us more about Violet's life; I want to know her better. Build character.

Overall Rating- My personal opinion, the story was alright. I was intrigued at the beginning, but slowly began to lose interest. Don't stop writing it, because I know others might think otherwise. It's appealing, but just not my taste... the whole love triangle thing. I can tell you and your coauthor have put a lot of work into the story, which is amazing! You both have lots of potential, so don't stop! Overall, I give it a rating of 6.5.

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