Grammar- Separate dialogue. When a new person begins to speak, indent. I was madly confused to whom was talking occasionally. But then in the second chapter you began separating dialogue; so just keep doing that and you'll be good. There was a few other grammar mistakes like spelling and punctuation, but you can easily go back and fix them.

Plot line- I did enjoy what I've read so far. There's many plots like this but there's just something different about this one; a good different. I love the chemistry between Michael and Ana. I want to see how they'll connect more and more throughout the story. So far the stories pretty good.

Summary- Summaries good. Reveals bits about what the stories gonna be about but not too much.

Cover- It's decent. The photoshop could be touched up a bit. Other than that, it's alright.

Characters- This is actually my first time reading a Michael fan fiction and I really like it and the way you portrayed him in the story. Ana's a little predictable; the perfect, little good girl, so I hope to see her maybe unravel differently as the story continues. But you and your coauthor really know how to build character, which is good.

What should be changed or fixed- Grammar needs touched up a bit. Maybe you could make the chapters longer if that's possible for you.

Overall rating- In my opinion, I like how the stories going so far. It's interesting and has potential to grow even more. Overall I give this story a 6.5.

Notes

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