Please Daddy

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A/N: I'm not using my format

I think that you should use the summary as the blurb. The summary says little about the story, and if you want to use it, the blurb is the best, it intrigues the reader. The summary should let us know a little about the story. Will it be about sex, will it be about adoption, who knows? The summary should at least hint at that. It doesn't have to be clear as day, it could be cryptic.
The cover was great. It showed the themes of the story (if you look closely, you can see the handcuffs). If this was my format, I'd give you an 8, because it still was a pretty effective advertising.

I think the main issue is that the plot line is really rushed. Slow it down a couple of chapters, add detail (not necessarily on smut, but, on the subtopics. And if you don't feel like you have any, make some. Not every conflict has to be the main one.), because, honestly? If it was slower, it'd be a ten. You have a few flaws, but not overly dominant, and, I have friends who read this and love it. Don't stop writing this, cause everything needs practice, and you definitely have a gift!

I still love numbers, so, this is a 9! Just slow it down, and add some more detail.

Notes

I had the help of Call_Me_Godot, since I was in a little stump, reviews are hard for me to write :/