Reviews

Rate" 3/5
Recommend?" maybe
tips: First of all i like your story, and i like where its going but your chapters need to be longer. I think you should have started with her receiving her first phone call from harry. make sure you proof read before you post because you confused me a bit when you brought up his hotel room in i think chapter 2 or 3, if you confuse your reader they arent going to want to read anymore, make sure you take your time and put forth your best effort when writing. Usually what helps me is i plan the story out a little bit before i write it. I'm not saying your not a good writer i just think it needs a bit of work.

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-Mia. XX please go read my new story the new eleanor.