I like the theme of the story since it’s quite unusual in fan fictions. The beginning is quite good actually (i don’t give actual compliments easily).

be careful of your syntaxe, grammar and conjugaison.

and the story line is good

really I don’t know what to say except that I literally swallowed your story. It’s great it’s really good :)

If you want to compare with the other stories and compare with the length of things they could do better in the previous reviews ^^ I believe it's a shame hat more popular story that are way too cheesy have more success then your great and different story :)

It’s really good and I really enjoyed it and think I might even subscribe :)

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