Reviews

Ok so there are a few things with this story that I wanted to go over.

-Josh and Mist While meeting a guy/girl and hitting it off right away is normal, I find it hard to understand how easily Mist let Josh take her baby so quickly. Realistically speaking, I'm not sure any mother/father would let a person they just met take their child at all, even if it was in eyesight. Also, how Mist lets her son calls Josh daddy. Again, they just met.

-Grammar/Spelling There are parts in the story that are overly descriptive. Mind you these are small parts, it's more along the lines of being repetitive. I know when you are writing you sometimes don't catch it and that's completely normal, I also have that problem. (i.e. Spelling mistakes, leaving out words)

-The storyline Maybe because I've read a couple stories with the similar storyline, I feel like it has been done before with 1/5 of the boys. Now, your story is far from over and I'm sure you've got some twists and turns in it. Therefore my conclusion on it is still just based off of what I've already read.

I've got to say, I think you take a lot of the negative messages/comments to heart and I understand because this is your baby. Ignore them because at the end of the day it's your story and you can write it however the hell you want. People don't have a gun put to their head, so they don't have to read it. Don't acknowledge the bad because there is no point. There is a fine line between constructive criticism and flat out hate. But, if you do ask for feedback keep an open mind. My dear, keep writing...always keep writing. Even if you think no one is reading. I expect some big twists in this story, so keep 'em coming.

Xoxo

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