Reviews

Alright, let me start by saying I really like how the story starts out. Depression is real and although certain areas could trigger someone, it could also help someone.

My case in point- Juliet writes poetry, that's her outlet. I'm not too familiar with depression, but I know enough to know that having an outlet to channel all of those urges and feelings helps even in the slightest bit.

Since it's still early on in the story I can't exactly tell what she's suffering from. But, based on her mother instilling in Juliet's head that she needs to be a certain size and needs to be perfect... I'm guessing depression for sure, as for the others I'm not quite sure yet.

I love that Zayn came to her defense right off the bat. Also adding the 'Capulet'. Totally cute.

I will say there were a few grammar mistakes, but let's be honest. Sometimes we're too close to the story/chapter so we need a fresh pair of eyes to catch them.

In my opinion, the last few chapters seem rushed. It escalated quickly. Zayn showing her the painting to hanging out sitting on his couch late at night. Buying her the tickets to the concert. It sounds (to me) like this all happened within a couple of days. Realistically speaking, (again in my opinion) I don't see a friendship escalating that quickly. Especially sleeping at their house. Juliet fell asleep on his bike. Now, I've only ridden on a motorcycle once but falling asleep on one sounds unrealistic.

My advice to you is to work on the build. It's time consuming yes, but it really paints the bigger picture for the reader. Rushing it will cause the reader to lose interest. (again in my opinion) The storyline that I see is great, I just want more of a build to it. I really want to see more from your story, so with that being said hit me with an update :)

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