Punctuation: 8.5
The punctuation was very good but could be better...
''Its amazing, Babe.''He kisses her forehead as he takes her back from me. *Incorrect*
''It's amazing babe.'' He kisses her forehead as he takes her back from me. *Correct*

Spelling: 10.0
I saw some misspellings.

Proper Word Usage: 8.5
Some words were misused and out of context, but not many.
''Oh my goodness! Its my Daddy's Princess!''He yells as we approach him. *Incorrect*
''Oh my goodness! Its Daddy's Princess!''He yells as we approach him. *Correct*

Interest: 9.5
The story was interesting, not your average love story. It's like Romeo and Juliet, but instead of Juliet being his lover. She is his daughter. I like it keep up the good work.

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Punctuation:
''New guy. Looks like he just moved here...he's to your right..by the black car in the driveway.. don't look straight at him though..''She softly says. *Incorrect*
''New guy, looks like he just moved here. He's to your right..by the black car in the driveway. Don't look straight at him though..''She softly says. *Correct*

Spelling:
I saw some misspellings, but hey! Who's perfect?

Proper Word Usage:
I have one two, but its still in England at the place we were staying. *Incorrect*
I have one too, but its still in England at the place we were staying. *Correct*

Interest:
It is interesting so far. Niall has some freaky mind reading powers.

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You have a gift! Keep up the good work!

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