Rating: 8.0

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So to start off, in your first chapter you gave us some backround information which is definitely fine,but you gave us way too much.You should let the readers figure some things on their own.Like,for example,when you said that the song was about her you could've let it be a little mystery thatt lingered in the story.

Also,don't put too much dialogue in your chapters.I noticed that SOME of your chapters had more dialogue then paragraphs.You need to let the readers know what's going on in the story instead of letting the character tell the story him/herself.

Your chapters weare also very short,three of your chapters could've been combined to make one awesome chapter.It's all about knowing where to end the chapters or if you should add a little more detail here and there.

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I really love the plot of your story! A few little tweaks and your story will be AMAZAYN!

Notes

Sorry I haven't done this in a while!I hope to read more stories,and if you want me to review your story just comment down below!

~xx Juli