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Fanfiction Expertise

Reviews:His or Mine?

Rating:9.7

Chapters:

Your chapters were a little to short and somewhat boring.Maybe you could add some drama here and there.And longer chapters are the key to a better story.If you wanna keep it short because of a cliffhanger that's fine.Just not too short.I still love the fact that you had humor in them and made it seem very realistic.

The flow
:

Your story was just a little bit rushed.Maybe adding more details and more events can lead up to the main event.

Grammar
:
You had a few grammar and spelling mistakes but it was still readable.

What you could add:

-Details
-Drama

Notes

Hey!First review!If you want me to review your story comment down below!

Comments

@Vanilla.
Awesome! Thanks a bunch!

darkcutie187 darkcutie187
12/3/14

Nicole
funny, sweet, caring, bubbly
Niall
Romantic sad
fight/makeup..please
and thanks :)

Niallers Nandos Niallers Nandos
12/3/14

@Niallers Nandos
sure :) Just comment the information in Chapter 7

shutyomouth shutyomouth
12/3/14

@AmandaStyles
Of course!

Vanilla. Vanilla.
12/3/14

Name- Skylar
Physical appearance- tall
Personality- bad temper, shy
Boy- Harry
Famous- Yes
Type- Sweet/Sad
Story- I got mobbed my fans and he saves me :D
Thanks!

Polka_Dot Polka_Dot
12/1/14