Rating:9.7

Chapters:

Your chapters were a little to short and somewhat boring.Maybe you could add some drama here and there.And longer chapters are the key to a better story.If you wanna keep it short because of a cliffhanger that's fine.Just not too short.I still love the fact that you had humor in them and made it seem very realistic.

The flow:

Your story was just a little bit rushed.Maybe adding more details and more events can lead up to the main event.

Grammar:
You had a few grammar and spelling mistakes but it was still readable.

What you could add:

-Details
-Drama

Notes

Hey!First review!If you want me to review your story comment down below!