Rating:9.9

The sweets:

Your chapters were perfect!You kept them interesting and very unique.The plot itself is very nice!Your grammar was great, you missed a few punctuation marks here and there and you mispelled some words but it was readable.The flow of your story was right on track!

The sours:

Like I said earlier your chapters were short. Addidn more details or events in between really stretches it out.If you write short chapters just to update faster,don't.Let your readers know that you take time on your chapters,loyal readers may wait for years until you update because they want something that keeps them on their toes.

Comments:Your story is awesome!Keep up the good work,all ut needs is some minor tweaks and it'll be perfect!

Notes

I like carrots.

~xx Juli