Spelling and Grammar: You misspelled a couple of words. Technic is supposed to be technique. Nothing to big, but you can see how it is actually spelled. Another word you misspelled was exited. It should actually be excited because exited means left. Your grammar is on point and you describe everything beautifully. I could actually picture it in my head.

Plot and Story Line: What could I say? You did amazing with coming up with something different. You've set the mood so far and I am actually dying to read more. Please update soon! You are really talented and I appreciate your work. Good job, love, and continue writing!

I would give this story a 10/10.

Notes

If I was a bit offensive, please tell me and I'll take your review down. I'm just being honest and giving you tips on what to do and what not to do. I'm trying to help you improve and that's my main goal of doing reviews. I'm not trying to be mean in anyway.