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Sisters + Boys and Somewhere
Sisters + Boys
Spelling and Grammar: There was a lot of sentences without punctuation. It kind of makes it hard to know which sentence is which. There really wasn't any spelling mistakes. Here's a What to Do and a What Not to do"
What Not to Do:
"Kylie do you want me to pick out your outfit?" Callie's voice rang through my room
"Yeah sure" I replied while tending to my mascara
"What style?" She said just as I walked into my room and flopped on the bed
"Punk" I said while staring at shirtless pictures of Zac Efron at the Movie Awards this year, god damn you Rita Ora for being brave and taking it off.
What to Do:
"Kylie, do you want me to pick out your outfit?" Callie's voice rang through my room.
"Yeah, sure," I replied while tending to my mascara.
"What style?" She said just as I walked into my room and flopped on the bed.
"Punk" I said while staring at shirtless pictures of Zac Efron at the Movie Awards this year. God damn you Rita Ora for being brave and taking it off.
See which one looks better? It makes so much more sense and people won't be rushing to read it and get confused. Please don't write in italics. Write normal unless it's a flashback. Italics are used for emphasis. So is having bold words. Do not capitalize the word for emphasis. Just it being bold can tell the reader it's emphasis.
Plot and Story Line: There was only one chapter and that was a prologue, so I really can't say anything about it until you update with more chapters. It'll be rude to review it. But from what I read I can tell it's going to be good.
I would give this story a 8/10.
Somewhere In Between
Spelling and Grammar: It's basically the same thing I told you earlier. Make sure you have punctuation. I do like how this one isn't in italics. Kudos to you.
Plot and Story line: I really like how you started off. She was with him for three weeks, then left, but she wrote a song for him. And then when they meet again, he's taken and she just realizes her feelings for him are still there.
I would give this a 8/10.
Spelling and Grammar: There was a lot of sentences without punctuation. It kind of makes it hard to know which sentence is which. There really wasn't any spelling mistakes. Here's a What to Do and a What Not to do"
What Not to Do:
"Kylie do you want me to pick out your outfit?" Callie's voice rang through my room
"Yeah sure" I replied while tending to my mascara
"What style?" She said just as I walked into my room and flopped on the bed
"Punk" I said while staring at shirtless pictures of Zac Efron at the Movie Awards this year, god damn you Rita Ora for being brave and taking it off.
What to Do:
"Kylie, do you want me to pick out your outfit?" Callie's voice rang through my room.
"Yeah, sure," I replied while tending to my mascara.
"What style?" She said just as I walked into my room and flopped on the bed.
"Punk" I said while staring at shirtless pictures of Zac Efron at the Movie Awards this year. God damn you Rita Ora for being brave and taking it off.
See which one looks better? It makes so much more sense and people won't be rushing to read it and get confused. Please don't write in italics. Write normal unless it's a flashback. Italics are used for emphasis. So is having bold words. Do not capitalize the word for emphasis. Just it being bold can tell the reader it's emphasis.
Plot and Story Line: There was only one chapter and that was a prologue, so I really can't say anything about it until you update with more chapters. It'll be rude to review it. But from what I read I can tell it's going to be good.
I would give this story a 8/10.
Somewhere In Between
Spelling and Grammar: It's basically the same thing I told you earlier. Make sure you have punctuation. I do like how this one isn't in italics. Kudos to you.
Plot and Story line: I really like how you started off. She was with him for three weeks, then left, but she wrote a song for him. And then when they meet again, he's taken and she just realizes her feelings for him are still there.
I would give this a 8/10.
Are you still doing reviews?
9/18/14