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Corruption

Spelling and Grammar: Everything is just in one big paragraph. Start off separating the dialogue, then work on putting things together that are the same subject. It'll make it easier for people to read and see the difference between who is talking. There were a couple errors where you misspelled the past tense. For instance, ringed should be rang. It flows better in a sentence.

Plot and Story Line: I also looked past the grammar errors and the story is really good. I'm on the edge of my seat reading it and I want you to update some more, love! You really have a talent for writing. Keep writing, love.

I would give this story a 9/10 due to grammar.

Notes

If I was a bit offensive, please tell me and I'll take your review down. I'm just being honest and giving you tips on what to do and what not to do. I'm trying to help you improve and that's my main goal of doing reviews. I'm not trying to be mean in anyway.

Comments

Are you still doing reviews?

One Direction 1O1 @ HarryStylesFanfiction.com
9/18/14

Author's Name: LuMichAshCalHoClifIrwHemmings
Name of Story: Good Girls Are Bad Girls
Characters I Want On Cover: Demi Lovato (Blonde), Avril Lavigne (Blonde And Green Hair), 15 year old Luke, and 17 year old Luke.
Anything Special: Author Name and Title.

Thank You SOSOSOSOSO much I suck at making covers.