Embers
Spelling and Grammar: You just need to space out the paragraphs after dialogue. It just makes it easier for people to read it. There weren't any spelling errors.

Plot and Story Line: I really like the plot. It's so different and it has me on the edge of my seat reading each chapter. I think you did a really good job on bringing out feeling. You and your coauthor are really good writers. I really like your story. I can't wait until the sequel comes out!

I would give this story a 10/10.


All I Need
Spelling and Grammar: There were a couple of spelling errors. They aren't hard to fix. Just read over your chapters before publishing.

Plot and Story Line: What can I say? Another amazing story that you have written. Even though it is one chapter I can tell that it is going to be extra good. Please update soon!

I would give this story a 9/10.

Notes

If I was a bit offensive, please tell me and I'll take your review down. I'm just being honest and giving you tips on what to do and what not to do. I'm trying to help you improve and that's my main goal of doing reviews. I'm not trying to be mean in anyway.