Grammar and Spelling: Don't get confused with their, there, and they're. Their means a possession which is what you should've used for a sentence in the prologue. There means in, at, or to in that place. They're is a contraction for they are.

Example of their: I saw their cat by the cold bay.
Example of there: I wanted to go there, but they insisted that we go somewhere else.
Example of they're: They're going to go down to the pier and find some food.

Those are the differences. You also had common, which I'm sure you meant to put Come on! Just reread your chapters. You were missing punctuation all over the place. Before publishing, reread your chapters. There weren't that many spelling errors.

Plot and Story Line: I love your plot and how it starts off. It is just so unique. I only got half way through the story because it's so long. I would've read all of it, but that would have taken days, and I don't want to have reviews stacked up. I like how you utilized the characters and made them seem so real. I felt like I was there with the details you gave. Just in the prologue don't have too much background information. I think it's better to spread it out. Readers want to figure out things and put it together.

I would give this story a 9/10.

Notes

If I was a bit offensive, please tell me and I'll take your review down. I'm just being honest and giving you tips on what to do and what not to do. I'm trying to help you improve and that's my main goal of doing reviews. I'm not trying to be mean in anyway.