Spelling and Grammar: There were only little mistakes that you can catch if you read them over. When you write it, make sure you read it over to make sure it makes sense. If you want it to be perfect, get somebody else to read it. That will also help you see if it makes sense to other people. You are a good writer. The chapters were long and beautiful and descriptive. You also had feeling added into it. I felt like I was there and I could feel how she felt. That helps people get into your story more.

Plot and Story Line: I love your plot. It's just so amazing. Nothing is rushed or going to slow. I love how her life was ruined after what she did. It's so different than all the other stories. You have a lot of creative ideas. I would love to see how you let this story go. It's very good.

I would give this a 9/10.

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