Reviews with the Reader
13 going 30 (gang rival diary)
So. I start from the top and work down. Title, cover, summary, characters, and then chapters.
So title. 13 going 30. I think you meant an “on” there. I think it’s supposed to be “13 going on 30.” But other than that the title is good.
Cover. I’m not too sold on the cover. I’m not sure that it really goes with the story. I think a better cover would be amazing!
Summary. In the first couple words, I found one mistake. “I guess you could same” I think you meant “I guess you could say…” it sounds better, even if it’s not what you meant. I really love the original gang names. Also, in another sentence “the diarys of the struggle…” I think you meant “the diaries of the struggle”?
Characters! As I said before, I LOVE the original gang names! Love love love! In the boys summary, you kept saying “Hided talent.” I think it should be “Hidden talent.” What do you think? BTW. I LOOOVVVEEEE 5SOS and the boys pictures are hot!
Chapters. I saw 1 spelling mistake in the first chapter. I also saw a couple of places where commas & apostrophes, were and were not needed. But nothing major. Chapter 1 was kinda short. But you realized that in the future chapters. The next couple chapters were a little longer and longer. Just a little longer, I think is the perfect length.
If you fix these couple of minor things, then it would be even better! Keep it up boo!
Notes
Heres the review! Much love!
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8/27/15