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Here is your review girl! I’m so sorry for the wait. Before I start, I just want to say that your story Trapped, & Meeting love, making success! There amazing!! So here goes you review!

Title: There’s Someone Always Watching

Author: Love_Life3

Okay so to start with the summary, it looked FAB! So great job with that! Next onto the characters, (A) some of your characters have names in the pictures, and some don’t. If you’re going to do names, have all of them with names. (B) In Tessa’s description, it say “has the Sight, Strength, and Wisdom.” Like does she have the Sight, Strength, and Wisdom of Vampire? I found her descriptions bit confusing. But there were no grammar/spelling mistakes in the summary or characters summary! :)

So I read the first chapter, and I understood what you meant by her Sight, Strength, and Wisdom. Got it! There were only like 5 grammar mistakes in chapter 1! If you’d like, I can show them to you! :) I liked the first chapter, although I think maybe there could’ve been more detail to help me (and other reader’s visualize a little better!) my favorite part of the first chapter was when Niall was explaining the sweet sixteen! I legit loled! Oh! In chapter one, when Nialler ran away, it said at the end, “I hid behind a bush hoping she would see me?” did you mean so she wouldn’t see me? Just thought you should know!

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Thanks again for waiting!! And again, thanks for waiting!!

Notes

Sorry for the long wait!!! Much love! Muah!