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Hey Stampy Cat! Its Jamal (and Paige here to help) I’m going to do my first ever review. Don’t hate me if it doesn’t come out like Paige’s. I’m going to set it up like Paige. Paige is here to walk me through how to do this :) Here goes nothing!

Title: Teenage Dirtbag

Author(s): Stampy Cat, One_Direction_Infection, Niallsgirl1 (you silly goose you didn’t say there was more than one author lol)

Okay. So the summary is a bit confusing. It doesn’t really make any sense. Maybe you could give more details in the summary? Then on to the characters list, there’s quite a bit of characters, and some of them have summary, and some don’t. Any particular reason? And the ones that’s do have summaries, are very generic, like meaning the same descriptions are used. Ya know what I mean?

I read the first chapter. Its good, but it could use some work. There’s not much detail as to what’s going on. A little more would actually give the reader the opportunity to visualize the scene. And in the chapters on Louis’s POV it says that Naomi has braces? I thought nobody knew she wore glasses? You can’t hide the fact that you have braces. I REALLY hope you don’t take any of this I have said the wrong way, but I couldn’t read the next chapter because Paige has other reviews. The good things, are I didn’t see a lot of spelling/grammar mistakes! So that’s great!! Also, your spacing was pretty good! Overall, it could use some work, buts its good. A new cover, could also attract some new subscribers. :) good luck with your story!

Notes

Here you go! I reviewed your story for with Paige's help since this is my first ever review! I hope it makes sense, any questions just message Paige and ask her and she'll ask me :) much love!