Honest Story Reviewer

Ok, first off, I only read the first chapter, but I enjoyed it!! :)

Ok, about your characters and summary.

A) Characters need subscriptions!!! You have to tell us about them love, those are attention grabbers!!

B) Your summary is way too long, once again, it's supposed to be an attention grabber, make people wonder about your story. It only needs to be a paragraph, and your's is like a chapter!!

Next off, try not to use curse words too often, it can cause you to loose viewers.

Now that I'm done with the bad news, here comes the good news!! :)

I love your writing skills, you look like you have been writing for a while :)
Keep up the good work love
Have a nice day xx

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