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Review #1
Rate: 8
Goods: I really love this story. I usually just read two chapters but I had to read on! I love how you made Vanessa. She has her own opinion on things and she's different and sorta I don't know spunky.
Improvements that could be made: I think that in your paragraphs you should make them up to 4-5 sentences. Just so people can read it better and more clear. When you mentioned V's dad's death. You didn't make it dramatic or like it mattered and trust me that's one thing that matters. And on your notes don't ask for comments cause you think your story isn't good. If you aren't confident in your story then no one else will be either. Take it off hold so I can read more please!
READ HER STORY FINDING LOVE!
@tellmetomlinson
aha no probelmo :) thx for the review :)
5/8/14