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In The Eyes Of A Slave

Chapter 1: In the first sentence ".. the sun shone directly into the I shut.." that doesn't sense so make sure you fix that.

".. beating,raped,gambled." Make sure you space that out.

You missed a lot of periods (.) at the end of your sentences and capitalization.


The rest of 4 chapters had a little of same errors, but I liked the plot and the rest. I might start reading it (:

8 out of 10

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Comments

Can you review my stories "Indigo Romance" and "Anonymous" please? :)

hvrrystyles hvrrystyles
1/26/14

Can you do Directioner games? :)

FutureMrsPayne FutureMrsPayne
1/4/14

Please do You're Baking My Love, Bakery Boy. If you can't that's fine. I will understand.

Love_Life3 Love_Life3
1/4/14

Thank you so much :D

SNOW SNOW
1/4/14

hiii could you review my stories "It's Not What It Looks Like" and "The Wanted Girl"? Thank you love xx

RealityRuinedMyLife RealityRuinedMyLife
1/4/14
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