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The Protectors

Summary

Kay Smith is the innocent new girl at Somerset High School in Bellflower, CA. She has had a rough life her dad is an alcoholic and her mother past away 3 months ago from a drug overdoes which is why she moved out here all the way from Connecticut, MA. She is nervous about starting at a new school until she meets Cally and Maggie, who introduce her to some people that will change her life.

Characters

Beau Brooks

Beau Brooks

(21) Luke and Jais older brother, Member of Luke and Jais gang

Cally Mello

Cally Mello

(17) Ditsy girl that loves to party, best friends with Kay and Maggie

Daniel Sahyounie

Daniel Sahyounie

(19) Member of Luke and Jais gang

Harry Styles

Harry Styles

(19) Member in Nialls gang, acts like a big brother to Kay

Jai Brooks

Jai Brooks

(19) Luke Brooks twin brother also a leader of there gang

James Yammouni

James Yammouni

(19) Member of Luke and Jais gang

Jemma Ross

Jemma Ross

(17) slutty girl who despises Kay, Maggie, and Cally.

Jordan Butler

Jordan Butler

(19) Leader of his gang wants to take Kay for him and his gang

Kay Smith

Kay Smith

(17)Innocent new girl who finds herself infatuated with two bad boys.

Liam Payne

Liam Payne

(19) Member of Nialls gang

Louis Tomlinson

Louis Tomlinson

(21) Member in Nialls gang

Luke Brooks

Luke Brooks

(19) Jai's twin, gang leader has Fallen for Kay

Maggie Walker

Maggie Walker

(17) hyper girl best friends with Kay and Cally

Niall Horan

Niall Horan

(19) Gang leader that falls for Kay

Scott Foster

Scott Foster

(18) Member of jordans gang

Tye Owens

Tye Owens

(18) Memeber of jordans gang

Zayn Malik

Zayn Malik

(20) Member of Nialls gang

Chapters

Comments

@sarahd98

aw thanks love and I will consider your suggestions I really appreciate them!!!

Kaylaa1D Kaylaa1D
1/3/14

Hey lovely! You're doing a great job with this story so far!
If you wanted my input here's what I got for you:

-Try to really process your ideas, don't make your sentences too choppy, focus on using correct grammar, capitalization, etc.

-Don't rush anything! The fillers may be boring but they are essential!

-Don't be afraid to go a little out of the box and describe things in a totally strange way, but nonetheless, use a lot of detail because it paints a better picture for the reader, it almost gets them emotionally attached to the story.

-Be original!

I hope you consider my suggestions and you're doing amazing! Keep it up darlin'!

sarahd98 sarahd98
1/3/14
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