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"Hola! Me llamo Zara." I said, grinning broadly at the stranger. Yes, I knew Spanish. I know 5 more langauges; English, Spanish, Chinese, Japanese, Korean and French.
Anyway, back to my seat neighbor. He was cute. I was going to be sitting next to him for 10 hours until we arrived at Spain, I might as well get to know him. "What?" He asked. I sighed, relieved he knew English. If he was going to Spain, though, then why didn't he know Spanish? "I said hello, my name is Zara." I informed him.
His eyes lit up. "Can you teach me Spanish? Please, Zara." "Of course!" I smiled at him. "Hola, Zara, me llamo Harold. Or Harry." "I prefer Harold." "And I prefer Sara." "What?" "Sara instead of Zara, okay?" "Okay. . ." "Good! Now. Spanish lessons!" I smiled at his enthusiasm. Here's what I taught him today:
Help—Socorro
What's your name—Cómo te llamas
Call a doctor—Llame a un médico
Thief—Ladrón
Where's the hospital—Dónde esta el hospital
Unfortunately, he isn't really a fast learner. We got one done every 2 hours. Well, 'call a doctor' and 'where's the hospital' took an extra 30 minutes. I started to teach 'I've been robbed' but we didn't finish.
As soon as me and Harry stepped off the plane, he said, "Sara, can I stay with you? I need to finish my lessons and besides, I don't have a place to stay. "Uhh, I guess you could." I turned to a flight attendent who was making sure no one got hurt. "Perdón, dónde está hotel más cercano?" The attendent smiled and gave me directions. "Gracias!" I thanked her. "Bienvenido." She replied. I grabbed Harry's hand and headed off for SS hotel.
When we arrived at Sweet Spain Hotel, or SSH for short, I spotted his really cute guy. I told Harry to get the bags in our room, get settled in. He seemed a bit confused but he obeyed. The cutie was heading off to the back of SSH. I followed him. He was talking to someone. "Babe, don't worry. She's just lying; I would never cheat." And then, the guy suddenly pulled a knife out. "I kill." He stabbed her. I had officially been scarred. Suddenly he turned around to face me.
"It's your turn, Zara Greens."
o.k. so just givin' u tips
1:make the story more suspensful.
2:get into more details
3:be more descriptive
4:explain more,dont repeat details,give a little twist at the end
5:finish off the chapter with the reader wanting to know more of whats going to happen and getting them excited 4 ur next update
i hope it goes well for you(; update soon!(:
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