Story Reviews

I would rate this story about an 8 to an 8.5. I really liked the beginning, where all the characters were introduced, and I like May, which is important. The plot was original, which I enjoy a lot, but it was really rushed. The whole story was about 30 chapters long, and so much happened in one chapter. There are reasons that people put fillers in between the main plot chapters, and it is so the reader can kind of relax and you can develop characters even more. I suggest you guys start doing this in the sequel, if you aren't already. I know that you mentioned having rushed the story in one of the notes on a chapter. Also, I don't really like the fact that she got pregnant. I am personally not a fan of when the main character gets pregnant, especially in this case where it was an accident (isn't it always?) and she doesn't know whose it is. And the chapter where she did potentially get pregnant isn't clear! I had no idea that it actually happened, I thought Harry stopped it from happening. I do think you have a good sequel set up, and I am probably going to read it to just get some peace of mind. There was a lot of unresolved conflict in this story (all the better, because then people like me want to read the sequel).

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Also, on another note, I'm sorry I'm not getting too many stories done right now. School is probably the craziest it will be all year, because it is near the end of the first semester and all of my teachers are giving tests and everything. I apologize and will attempt to read more during the week. I don't usually have a lot of time. Thank you for every one who is reading this, though. It means so much to me :D