Fighting for What we Want
rate: 9
idea: +
grammar: good
advice: 2

I think you have a great idea. I like the cliff hangers and they make me want to keep reading. At first the story seemed to be not very original but you really surprised me after a few chapters and it's really good!

1. When you write, separate your dialogue instead of writing it all in one big paragraph. It's hard to tell who is talking when it is all thrown together.

2. In the beginning you said Harry was in a hotel but then he was living with the guys. Was he somewhere else or did he just get the hotel for them? I could have read it wrong.

Overall I think it's really great. Keep going with it!

Dripping Blood
rate: 8.5
idea: =
grammar: okay
advice: 2

This story starts out really intense and I liked that. I just feel like everything is being rushed though. For example, Niall and Mel were best friends and then a little bit into it they were kissing. I think it's good but maybe if they gradually began to have feelings for each other. Another thing is that the same thing happened in your other story with Ruby and Niall. They begin kissing and the boys interrupt them.

Other than that I like the idea and I'm excited to see what else will happen!